短文改错:Now I'd like to tell you something took place in my school yesterday .短文改错:Now I'd like to tell you something took place in my school yesterday .In the afernoon we are all held together for our 18-years-old b

短文改错:Now I'd like to tell you something took place in my school yesterday .短文改错:Now I'd like to tell you something took place in my school yesterday .In the afernoon we are all held together for our 18-years-old b
短文改错:Now I'd like to tell you something took place in my school yesterday .
短文改错:Now I'd like to tell you something took place in my school yesterday .In the afernoon we are all held together for our 18-years-old birthday .At the first we promised that like grown-ups we should be responsible for our society .Then we expressed thank to our parents who experienced hardships to bring us up and our teachers who educated us heart or soul. And our teachers also gave to us cards expressing our good congratulatins and wishes to us .Firnally ,we put on wonderfully performances.
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短文改错:Now I'd like to tell you something took place in my school yesterday .短文改错:Now I'd like to tell you something took place in my school yesterday .In the afernoon we are all held together for our 18-years-old b
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Now I'd like to tell you (改成something that took 或 something taking) place in my school yesterday. In the afernoon we (去掉 are) all held together for our 18-(year)-old birthday. At (去掉the) first we promised that (like改成as) grown-ups we should be responsible for our society. Then we expressed (thank改成thanks) to our parents who experienced hardships to bring us up and our teachers who educated us heart (or改成and) soul. And our teachers also gave (去掉to) us cards expressing (our改成their) good congratulatins and wishes to us. Firnally, we put on (wonderfully改成wonderful) performances.

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Now I'd like to tell you something which took place in my school yesterday .In the afernoon we were all held together for our 18-year-old birthday .At first we promised that as grown-ups we should be responsible for our society .Then we expressed thanks to our parents who experienced hardship to bring us up and to our teachers who educated us heart or soul. And our teachers also gave us cards expressing our good congratulations and wishes to ourselves.Finally , we put on wonderful performances.

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took 前面加that
are---were
18-years-old ----18-year-old
At the first 去掉the
like----as
thank ----- thanks
or-----and
去掉gave后面的to
expressing our -------expressing their
wonderfully------wonderful