这是我写的英文,请帮我挑挑错或者提提意见Almost everybody wants to be successful and as you know, to be successful sometimes is rather difficult. But the distance of failure and success could be also very short. Now, I’ll tell you

这是我写的英文,请帮我挑挑错或者提提意见Almost everybody wants to be successful and as you know, to be successful sometimes is rather difficult. But the distance of failure and success could be also very short. Now, I’ll tell you
这是我写的英文,请帮我挑挑错或者提提意见
Almost everybody wants to be successful and as you know, to be successful sometimes is rather difficult. But the distance of failure and success could be also very short.
Now, I’ll tell you a story which I read in a magazine.
There was a young man who wanted to find a good job, so he send his resume to a company. But unfortunately, he failed in the first interview.Eleven people was agreed to go for the second interview. But the manager noticed that there were twelve people sitting in front of her.
Can you guess who is the unwanted man for the interview? Yeah, it is right the young man! Since he had failed the first time, why did he come now? The young man said: I wasn’t reconcile to the result and wanted to know in which aspect other people did better than me. I used to worked for 18 companies without a job-hopping.The reason why I had to change job so frequently was that all of the 18 companies closed down one by one. I known the reasons of every failed company were totally different. So I accumulated abundant experience. For example, the real examiner was the aged man against the door who served the tea for us just now.
It was surprising that the real examiner admitted the young man immediately for he wondered why his disguise failed.So, you see, sometimes it is easy to be successful from failure.
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这是我写的英文,请帮我挑挑错或者提提意见Almost everybody wants to be successful and as you know, to be successful sometimes is rather difficult. But the distance of failure and success could be also very short. Now, I’ll tell you
1.There was a young man who wanted to find a good job, so he send his resume to a company.这里的send改为sent
2.Eleven people was agreed to go for the second interview.这里应该用复数的,还有agree的用法这里好像怪怪的,改为required（要求）会好一点.
3.Can you guess who is the unwanted man for the interview? 这里应该用过去式was吧
4.I wasn’t reconcile to the result .这里的意思应该是不满意吧,应该改为i didn't satisfied with the outcome.
5. wanted to know in which aspect other people did better than me. 这里which前面的in 可省略
6.I used to worked for 18 companies without a job-hopping.这里worked用完形.
7.I known the reasons of every failed company were totally different. 这里的konwn改为过去式.大概这样了吧

Everybody wants to success and as you know, to be successful is rather difficult. Yet sometimes the distance of failure and success could be very short.
Now, I am telling you a story I read in a ...

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Everybody wants to success and as you know, to be successful is rather difficult. Yet sometimes the distance of failure and success could be very short.
Now, I am telling you a story I read in a magazine.
There was a young man who wanted to find a good job, so he send his resume to a company. Unfortunately, he failed in the first interview. Eleven people were allowed to go to the second interview. But the manager noticed that there were twelve people sitting in front of her.
Can you guess who is the unwanted man for the interview? Yeah, it was right the young man! Since he had failed the first time, why did he come now? The young man said: I wasn’t reconciled to the result and wanted to know in which aspect other people did better than me. I used to worked for 18 companies without a job-hopping.The reason why I had to change job so frequently was that all of the 18 companies closed down one by one. I known the reasons of every failed company were totally different. So I accumulated abundant experience. For example, the real examiner was the aged man against the door who served the tea for us just now.
It was surprising that the real examiner admitted the young man immediately for he wondered why his disguise failed.So, you see, sometimes it is easy to be successful from failure.

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第4行，send改为sent；第10行，had改为have，was改为is。
整篇文章基本上没什么大的错误，但有些略嫌口语化，标点的使用也不够正确，前面两段多次使用but，我觉得应该用多种方式去表达，使文章更具吸引力。总的来讲，这是篇不错的文章。