作业帮本人考托福 今天写了一篇作文 大神看看能得几分,哪里可以改进的?Do you agree or disagree with the following statement with the help of technology,students nowadays can learn more information and learn it more quickly.Use speif
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本人考托福 今天写了一篇作文 大神看看能得几分,哪里可以改进的?Do you agree or disagree with the following statement with the help of technology,students nowadays can learn more information and learn it more quickly.Use speif
本人考托福 今天写了一篇作文 大神看看能得几分,哪里可以改进的?
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement with the help of technology,students nowadays can learn more information and learn it more quickly.Use speific reasons and examples to support your answer
本人考托福 今天写了一篇作文 大神看看能得几分,哪里可以改进的?Do you agree or disagree with the following statement with the help of technology,students nowadays can learn more information and learn it more quickly.Use speif
这篇文章就是fair的水平.文章结构是清晰的.观点-论点-论点-summarize
说些问题
1.字数不够
2.第一段模板痕迹太严重,强烈建议摆脱模板
3.论点里面的supporting句子不够strong,内容太空洞.还有逻辑要严格,一句推出一句,有组织性.
里面既然提出自己的example,就要写出色.
4.有一部分语法错误,表达很随意,语言功底不是很强.
tips
1.模仿范文的结构,而不是语言!
2.范文的行文思自己琢磨一下,托福的写作其实是比较死板的.
3.多练!